A Look Back [Grade Two]: A Magical World (Part III)

It's been so long since I posted something I'd written when I was eight. Well, I want to finish Sam's story, and then maybe I'll lead you through Peter's crossover story. And maybe after that, I'll consider finishing Ashley's story. Either I'll update the style, or I'll attempt to satirise my 10-years-ago self. Either way, it should be interesting, and it will be nice having the decaying tangible copy in digital format, so at least the words will stay with me.

[Note: If you haven't read the earlier entries in A Magical World, you can do so by clicking the tag at the end of this post.]

[Paragraphing added for your reading pleasure.]

A Magical World: Sam's Life!

Part III: The Dragon

Peter, Ashley and I were walking down the passage when Sam tho I saw a fireplace and stopped stoped stopped. Peter and Ashley stopped stoped as well.

"What's the matter?" Phill Peter asked.

"You know that moving wall, there's one in that fireplace."

"How do you know that?"

"I'll check it." So I did, I took a button and pushed it into the fire place wall. It was pushed about a meter back. "I think we should leave this until after practice and REPELLING-SMALL-BIG Class. So they we practiced and practiced until the bell went. The We entered REPELLING class. A teacher named Ms Mcoy was sitting behing an very old looking desk.

She said, "I was expecting you three later, but come in anyway." "we'll start withe REPELLING small to BIG, hold up five fingers to the plant you will find on your desks, then add another five fingers and your plant will grow. If you would like to shrink it back to medium size hold up eight fingers. To shrink from medium hold up eight fingers and fist Four. To shrink from BIG hold up Ten fingers and fist five, for that it will be normal size again. NOW THAT YOU HAVE LEARNT TO REPELL - CLASS DISMISSED!


They We walked around the Castle for about an hour when Sam I stopped stoped stopped, remembering the fireplace. He I ran down the corridor, round and round a blocks and through a door when he I found out, Phill Peter and Ashley behind him me, until he I found the fire place. I saw the pushed block and walked passed it. They we walked down a long corridor, although we heared big footsteps on the other side of the wall.

We walked, scared, hearing scattering, stomping, screaming, ROARING noises. Just then, a red, clawed hand punched a brick out of place. Then a whole body in form of a dragon knocked a Million bricks out of place wich toppled onto the stone floor and broke into Thousands and Thousands if pieces. Ashley screamed and bolted down the corridor. Phill Peter ran after her yelling his head off, which left me with the dragon.

It blew Five fire balls at me. I dodged Three and ducked from Two. I bredt breathed Three fire balls at it, to the dragon's suprise, it froze, wide opened mouth. Then, to my suprise, they went down the dragon's throat. They seemed to hit where the dragon's soal was meant to be. I guessed it died on the spot. I ran back down the corridor and out the fireplace screen, right passed Phill Peter and Ashley, out the enterance portrait, out the fake enterance, into the grounds and home out in no time as fast as I could and never came back.



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Jean Davis said...

So you were a victim of paragraphless writing too? My kids did that and it drove me nuts. It's the first thing I taught them when they starting doing NaNaWriMo and I had to count their words. I hound them on proper paragraphs, dialogue tags, and punctuation... Sucks having a writer mom. ;)

Ryan Sullivan said...

I sure was.

Yeah, I didn't have to put up with a writer mum. Lucky me. ;)

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