Chapter One: Complete

Thanks to some constructive utilisation of time, I have finally finished Chapter One. It finished at 2,815 words, and brings the novel so far to 3,342 words. It was very refreshing to write "Chapter Two" in nice bold letters the next page down. I hope the cliffhanger will be effective enough.

When it goes up in queue a few weeks from now (I expect it will be a few weeks, due to the constantly full state of the Fantasy queue and my lack of credits), it will be titled: "Aundes Aura: Chapter One (revised and complete)".

For those of you who critiqued my last post of Chapter One, I thank you. If you decide to critique this version also, then I don't expect you to re-crit anything, only the new stuff.

1. I cut the scene with Old Hanne. Instead, Eoin comes up with the idea to take Saera to the church and pray.
2. Added a scene in the church. We discover how churches in Válkia differ from those in our world.
3. Added the scene of the Passing Ceremony, and a scene in the forest which was carried over from my first attempt at the novel.

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Terreur Nocturne said...

YaY for Chapter Two!!! Feels awesome right?

zellakate said...

I must have missed this post when it was on my dashboard. I will definitely crit the revised version when it comes up! :)

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